Jim:
This is Beemaster, the guy who runs the site and one a 1 to 10 scale knows about a 4 on bees - but you have come to the right place and have been given good advice.
Honestly, I'd try to play up the DEATH ANGLE of the drone when mating and it's odd by similar death angle when a worker (females bee - only they can sting) also dies when they sting FLESHY CREATURES LIKE US. Because they are plated (exoskeleton if you choose, workers can sting each other without losing their stingers, thus NOT die - but for every drone who mates, death follows for him and as stated 10 or often more drones mate with a new "virgin queen" during her "maiden flight" the stuff in parentheses are exact terminologies WORTH bookmarking in your project.
The question then becomes, does the drone know he will die after mating, is the urge so strong that he willing gives his life to help the colony survive - or is he clueless and caught off surprise?
Your article content is great - I would grade it a B or B+ - but if I added questions like I mentioned above, I would gladly give you an A or better because it showed you understood the material and went beyond learning or just copying material found from different sources (which I hope you did not do).
It is important for a student to understand that THEY are the first and almost second generations to have such resources available at a keyboard near them. Real encyclopedias, dictionaries and magical pocket sized collections of words, often filled with photo (these strange things we use to call BOOKS) worked for man for a very long time - to run to the net, master hunting out obscure material that would be hard for a teacher to track back DOEN'T make you a good student, it makes you a good researcher. I think you are doing it the right way and bless you for it.
Glad you stopped in for help, PLEASE RETURN to let us know HOW YOU DID, we will all be looking for your response - PLEASE POST IT UNDER THIS ORIGINAL POST OF YOURS. Good work Jim, I hope someday you get to experience beekeeping up close and not just on TV, it is like driving a low budget "smashem' up car game" and then getting behind the wheel of a real sports car on the open road - You can't compare and no one can ready you for the experience either. Best Wishes.
John
Beemaster